This is my Writing about Basket Ball,

I have used Capital letters at the start of each sentence and I have used strong verbs also I did each new action on a new line for my success criteria. Here is my piece of writing...

As I speedily skip,

I take a step and I get closer each second to the goal.

I dream of getting that bouncy ball in to the goal,

"Then I score"!

1\3 On the scoreboard

Crowd cheers loudly as we settle in to our possessions.

The whistle is squealing,

Ready to pass the ball to my team

As I see there steady eyes,

Yelling out "SUMMER PASS IT TO ME I’M FREE".

I raise the ball,

Ball swings about aiming for the goal

Defending people

Fly's

Shakes

Wobbles

and then

           and then

                      and then

"I SCORE"!

4\1 On the scoreboard.